加州大学2017秋季申请短文写作辅导与范文精讲(3)-搜狐

引言：加州大学University of California将于今年8月1日开始接受2017秋季的入学申请，最新的申请短文题目已发布。达人帮文书darenhelp.com特此推出了连载系列，提供写作指导和参考范文。

前两期讲解了Question1.Leadership, Question2.Creativity, Question3.Talent and Skill,本文将继续讲解Question4.Educational opportunity OR barrier

题目解析

Question 4: Describe how you have taken advantage of a significant educational opportunity or worked to overcome an educational barrier you have faced.

这道题目包含了两组关键词，“educational opportunity”, “educational barrier” ，可以从“契机”与“困难”二者中任选其一进行讨论。这里的“契机”应该理解为你在学习课程的时候获得的学习乐趣和积极体验；而“困难”应该理解为你面临的学习障碍，以及如何克服它们。下面达人帮文书darenhelp.com将分别介绍两种情况的构思方向：

契机:

列举你参加过的一些项目或课程，是它们帮助你更好地为你今后求学做准备：

l 你对这些项目、课程有何感受？

l 你如何把所学应用到学业或生活的其他方面？

困难：

l 你是否面临过一些有关学校和学业的障碍或挑战？

l 你是怎么努力尝试克服它们的?l 列举你在克服困难过程中表现出的三个品质:

每个人在学习过程中都遇到过自己擅长或不擅长的地方，所以这道题目可以结合自己体验来真实地表达。但是越是容易的题目越难写得精彩，你应该思考怎样写作能让自己脱颖而出。

达人帮文书范例

达人帮文书darenhelp.com为许多同学策划过这道题目，在交流过程中发现人们喜欢某门学科是因为自己从一开始就学得比较顺利，而厌恶某些学科则是出于无法取得好成绩。怎样能在这种“人之常情”中逆袭? 看达人帮文书怎样给招生官讲述一个愈挫愈勇、最终培养起学习热情的励志故事。

Sample for Question4

Beyond Plug-and-Chug Math

I HAVE ALWAYS BEEN A MATH-SCIENCE girl. I sighed and sulked through classes on US History and French in eager anticipation of the formulas and applications I would be learning later in the day. I believe there are many factors which attribute to my success, two being my fascination and persistence.

I wasn't always good at math, contrary to what students in my classes might say. When I first showed interest in math in the 5th grade my parents laughed; middle school was even worse. Incoming 6th graders were given a test on the second day of school and depending on their scores were placed into a high or low speed math class. I was put in the slow speed math and missed a lot of class my first year, as a result my grade drifted from a B to a C to a C-, then I got help. I knew I liked math and I didn't want to do bad in it so I bought books and hired my older brother to help me. I eventually made it to a B+. Later, in the summer after my junior year, I took a course that covered nearly a year of Calculus. I was told that if I decided to take Calculus AB, I would be bored, so I went for a challenge. My strongest subject began to take up most of my time. I had to read review books, go online for help, and stay in during nutrition and lunch for extra instruction. It was hard, but my dedication paid off and I earned an A. This persistence and drive also help me excel in math.

达人帮文书点评

达人帮文书darenhelp.com在构思时认为如果想要出彩，就要细腻得将克服学习困难时的心理活动加以描写与刻画，才能充分体现出申请人对于数学的热爱。

接着，我们写道申请人在数学方面取得优秀成绩的原因在于热爱和坚持。最精彩的地方是接下来笔锋一转，直言不讳地表明申请人并非从一开始就擅长数学，申请人回忆自己小时候曾经被分到了进度慢的数学班里，并且由于种种原因，数学成绩不断下降（从B到C, 再到C-）。

面对这些困难和挫折，达人帮文书在写作时突出了申请人克服困难的各种方法——参考书籍、请哥哥帮忙，终于成绩有了起色，得到了B+。后来在一个暑假，为了挑战自己，修了较难的微积分课程——微积分AB。讲述了他在学习的过程中，花了大把时间和经历，参考书籍、寻求线上帮助，争分夺秒。最后自己的努力终于得到了回报，取得了A的成绩。所以说，是坚持和对于数学的痴迷使得她在数学方面取得了骄人的成绩。

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