加州大学2017秋季申请短文写作辅导与范文精讲(6)-搜狐

引言：加州大学University of California将于今年8月1日开始接受2017秋季的入学申请，最新的8个申请短文题目已发布，申请人要从中选择4道题目回答。达人帮文书darenhelp.com特此推出了连载系列，提供写作指导和参考范文。前几期讲解了

Question 1. Leadership

Question 2. Creativity

Question 3. Talent and Skill

Question 4. Educational opportunity OR barrier

Question 5. Challenge

Question 6. Favourite subject

Question 7. Community Service

本文将继续讲解Question 8.One thing that set you apart

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题目解析

Question 8. What is the one thing that you think sets you apart from other candidates applying to the University of California?

达人帮文书darenhelp.com解析：这道题的关键词组是set apart——与众不同。就是让谈谈你身上的闪光点、独具特色的地方。可以稍微地吹一下牛。即使你认为自己并不是优秀到绝无仅有，你也是在这个世界上独一无二的。你是怎样一个人取决于多种因素，如你的经历、家庭、兴趣和价值观。

列出三条人格特质（可以问问朋友、家人，看看他们会怎样描述你）：

你认为生活中最值得珍惜的是什么？什么对你来说很重要？在此列出三项：

你对什么有热情？

你最珍惜的东西是什么？列举在此处，思考他们为什么对你来说有重要意义。

达人帮文书darenhelp.com在与同学做写作指导与交流的时候，聊到深处，都能发现这名同学拥有自己独特的地方，不仅仅指天赋特长。就像刚才列举的几项——人格、最珍惜的事物、情有独钟的事物……与自己有关的一切，都在证明着每个人的独特性。

达人帮文书范例

Sample for Question8

在达人帮文书 darenhelp.com规划的这篇文章中，就是用一种品格——勇于尝试、无所畏惧、突破自我，证明自己的独特性。与许多同学不同，申请人并没有强调自己的特长，例如跆拳道、音乐等，而是将他们一笔带过，统统归入“舒适区”范畴，别出心裁地将重点放在了“舒适区”之外的部分。

Anything Goes

I HAVE ALWAYS BEEN COMFORTABLE WITH Tae Kwon Do, music, art, and friends. However, as a horse in Chinese astrology, I also need to explore different pursuits, and step outside of my comfort zone. This summer, I ventured beyond the pasture of my comfort zone, and participated onstage in the high school summer musical for the first time.

The biggest challenge of taking this leap was overcoming my own mental barrier—the sign that read, Jean, you have never had a dance lesson; you have no idea how to sing or act. Out of fear that I would feel uncomfortable, I believed that playing violin in the pit orchestra was my calling. However, after three years of pit orchestra experience, I longed to shine in that coveted spotlight. I did not tell my friends about how I wondered what it would feel like to act onstage in front of eight hundred people. When I saw that the title of the musical for this past summer was Anything Goes, I knew that no one would think worse of me for following my aspirations. Confident that my friends would encourage me, I let go of my cautious Chinese approach to life, and let the free-spirited horse within me escape.

Now, I will not shy away from being in a musical cast because my comfort zone is expanding. Soon it will encompass the grand scope of my interests: from singing and dancing to throwing a sales pitch in front of judges; from learning how to execute precision front-flips to building my favorite piano repertoire; from designing a webpage to arranging chamber music, or developing optics technologies. Such passions will continue to define who I am and what I hope to achieve. My character is being shaped and reshaped by my learning experiences because I am an impressionable human being. As I continue to explore, I know that my interests will solidify into a cohesive whole. Until then, I seek to enrich myself with new opportunities and never look back.

达人帮文书点评

申请人虽然擅长跆拳道、音乐美术、社交，但是自己总在寻求跳出“舒适区”的机会，她认为这是一种冒险，很奇妙。这个暑假，她就尝试着在聚光灯下，面对观众表演。

达人帮文书darenhelp.com在策划第二段时，着重突出了申请人在挑战自我时的忐忑与心理斗争。她多么想躲开聚光灯，在台下的交响乐团中舒舒服服地演奏啊！但是她意识到自己需要改变、超越、突破。虽然对于站在台上、聚光灯下，面对八百名观众表演的情景一点概念都没有，但当她看到“Anything goes”时，顿时释然了——没有人会因为她的勇气而嘲笑自己。她抛掉了自己身上尚存的一丝“中国式保守”，让心中那匹野马尽情奔腾。

申请人不断地从舒适区“自我突围”，一次次将原本有所畏惧的事情囊括到舒适区中——达人帮文书darenhelp.com在写作时列举了申请人每一次转变：除了在聚光灯下表演，还在法官面前展现自己的口才、学会了高难度前空翻、汇编自己最喜爱的钢琴曲目、设计网页、发展光学技术……在一次次的突围中，她不断认识新的自己，明确方向。她知道新拓展的领域都会使自己更加丰富。达人帮文书darenhelp.com在写作时，记录了申请人的成长，突出了她不断寻求新突破、无所畏惧、奋勇前进的品格。达人帮文书darenhelp.com认为，拥有挑战自我的勇气，是增长本领的金钥匙。本领不会，可以学。而若缺乏勇气，人就没有了进步的可能。所以，这位申请人一定能够脱颖而出。

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下期看点

下期，达人帮文书将继续解读加州大学系统的personal insight question 中transfer学生的必答题。优秀的范文讲解，真正的原创干货，千万别错过！

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