加州大学2017秋季申请短文写作辅导与范文精讲(7)-搜狐

引言：加州大学University of California将于今年8月1日开始接受2017秋季的入学申请，最新的8个申请短文题目已发布，申请人要从中选择4道题目回答。达人帮文书darenhelp.com特此推出了连载系列，提供写作指导和参考范文。前几期讲解了

Question1.Leadership

Question2.Creativity

Question3.Talent and Skill

Question4.Educational opportunity OR barrier

Question5. Challenge

Question6. Favourite subject

Question7.Community Service

Question8.One thing that set you apart

记得连载系列1曾提到，对于转学申请来说有一道必答题目吗？本文将介绍这道题目。

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题目解析

Transfer question：As a transfer applicant, you’ll need to answer the following required question: Please describe how you have prepared for your intended major, including your readiness to succeed in your upper-division courses once you enroll at the university.

达人帮文书darenhelp.com建议，你可以通过思考这些问题开始组织自己的答案：

课堂经历如何开启了你对本专业的兴趣?
又有哪课外活动培养了你的兴趣?
又有什么其他因素(来自于文化、社区、家庭等)引导你朝这个专业发展?
你的目标专业与长期目标是如何关联统一的?

达人帮文书范例

在这里，有一名转学申请人申请的是生物工程专业。达人帮文书darenhelp.com在为同学整理文书素材时发现，许多热爱理工科的学生都有做实验的经历，其中经历的酸甜苦辣，冷暖自知。

在达人帮文书darenhelp.com规划的这篇文章中，申请人以细腻的笔触，还原了刚进入实验室的场景，以及自己在过程中遇到挑战时的心理活动（达人帮文书darenhelp.com在规划文书时，非常注重副词如painstakingly以及词组如bated with breath的使用）。并且他在整个暑期与胚胎干细胞为伴，足以见得申请人对于生物工程的热爱。下面就来看看，这名转学申请人是如何用实验经历诠释自己对生物工程学科的兴趣的。

Sample for transfer questionA Summer of Stem Cells

I started my internship a little overwhelmed by the fancy hoods, automatic pipettes, and high-speed centrifuges. But by the first of the 170 hours, I had familiarized myself with the equipment and begun my quest to find the function of PRDM1—a gene thought to control replication in hESCs. First though, I needed to make a growth medium for the hESCs. I painstakingly measured to the ten millionth of a liter, testing the accuracy of each measurement multiple times before finally dispensing it into the medium solution. After I had plated the hESCs on my new medium, I waited with bated breath for the results.

To my joy, two days later, my cells were thriving and even outgrowing their new home. Known for their ability to quickly replicate, it was logical they would need to be frequently transferred. The difficult part was that, as part of my experiment to find the purpose of PRDM1, I had different strains of hESCs (some serving as “control” strains) which could not be mixed. Transferring hESCs is a process requiring great concentration and coordination. It took me about three hours the first time. By the end of the month, though, transferring was second nature and my cells were doing well—I had inserted a fluorescent protein into their DNA to verify the hESCs containing the resistant vector were living, as hypothesized. I had successfully created hundreds of stable hESC colonies of different strains.

达人帮文书点评

申请人在刚开始实习时，对先进的实验器材与设备还比较生疏。但经过170个小时的熟悉时间后，便开始切入自己研究的主题。实验的第一步便是制备培养基，这个过程是繁琐而痛苦的。他需要先精确测量千万分之一升的体积的液体，再还需数次验证测量的准确性，确保无误后，才能将所测量液体加入到培养液中。一切就绪后，把胚胎干细胞植入于培养基，便开始了焦虑而漫长的等待。达人帮文书darenhelp.com认为，实验的另一个难点在于分离。整个分离过程需要高度集中注意力，以及协调流畅的操作。申请人第一次分离操作花了三个小时的时间。但是，随时间推移，操作越来越轻车熟路，甚至就像自己的“第二天性”一样。最后作者应用了荧光蛋白标记法，发现带有抗性基因的菌落可以在培养基中存活，由此，成功地验证了假设。

整个的实验过程，都在体现申请人具备了一名生物工程学生应具备的所有素质：热爱研究、敢于假设、操作能力强、认真严谨以及坚持不懈。

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